The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table predicts the change in the number of people who visit Ashdown Museum after the changes that have been made in. whilst the charts show the outcomes of surveys have been made to measure the satisfaction degree of
visitors
during the same time.
Overall
, we can notice that the number of visitors
has increased significantly after renewing the place. While
the surveys reflect that the number of visitors
who were very satisfied doubled, furthermore
those who were not satisfied became less to
half.
Change preposition
than
First,
the visitants were 74000 persons before redecoration
Correct article usage
the redecoration
the
venue, but it raised to 92000 one after the changes. Change preposition
of the
In addition
, the consequents
which reflect visitants’ Replace the word
consequences
opinion
show pivotal arising of people were very satisfied from 15 % to 35 %. Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
While
the percentage of those who were not satisfied before and after were 40 %, 15
% respectively. Correct word choice
and 15
Moreover
, visitors
who were very dissatisfied dropped to the
half from 10 to 5%.Correct article usage
apply
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