The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the comparative data of the number of
hours
that each country adopt to teach students of 3 levels
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22 years ago ; primary, lower secondary and upper secondary,
Overall
, it can be clearly seen from the graph that
hours
spent in upper secondary schools were the highest in the four countries, in the contrast, the number of
hours
in the primary was the lowest, Glancing at the chart reveals that the USA clearly was teaching significantly more
hours
comparatively
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to the others country with 1200
hours
in the upper secondary, 1000
hours
in lower secondary and 700
hours
in primary,
whereas
Iceland was ranked as second in
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of teaching
hours
, by 900
hours
in upper secondary
while
both levels were relatively close by 600
hours
not far from,
on the other hand
, Spain was educating the same number of
hours
as Iceland in upper
sencondary
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secondary
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in the remaining levels Spain was slightly devoting more
hours
roughly about 700
hours
,
while
Japan was the lowest
hours
teaching comparing to the four others countries.
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