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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In recent times, the idea of having only
one
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 occupation or means of
income
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 is getting outdated and non-sustainable. Meanwhile, the new trend is to have more than
one
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 career or means of
income
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 with continuous learning. With the recent events in our economy, the latter will most likely continue throughout
life
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 and become the normal way of
life
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. In
this
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 essay, I will be discussing both sides of the case with relevant examples and experiences.
Firstly
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, having a career path is
one
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 major thing young people look forward to. Where they can grow in that particular field and become professionals in a big multinational company.
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 comes with a steady increase in earnings as they attain a higher level, but it can make them limited to only
one
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 space and have little knowledge about
life
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.
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, having more than
one
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 means of
income
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 and skill-set, helps to have a vast range of knowledge about a lot of things
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, there can be an avenue for passive
income
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.
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, with the recent economic crisis on the rising cost of living, having only
one
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 source of
income
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 is becoming non-sustainable .
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, continuous learning and various skill-set needed to earn more money are essential presently. From my experience, a person with more than
one
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 occupation tends to have less risk of becoming broke compared to
one
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 with only
one
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 occupation because the former will be able to invest more with the other means of
income
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 and create a passive
income
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. In conclusion, it is very important that young professionals learn new and lucrative skills to serve as another means of
income
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 and become professionals in a particular
one
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.
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, learning should all through and at different phases of
life
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, so as to remain relevant in the economy.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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