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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is not fair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days sports celebrities gained more money than others. The question is, is it fair enough compared with other essential occupations? In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my conclusion.  On the one hand, those who believe that famous game
player
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 deserve a huge rate of money because they represent the country all over the world and make proud all the
people
 of nations
as well as
 create a world record for the country.
Furthermore
, for all of
this
, they can follow the proper diet and spend more
time
 for practice. So, it is fair to earn a great amount than other fields
people
. 
On the other hand
, Some
people
 think that it is fully wrong with other stream
people
.
Firstly
, other important field workers spend more
time
 than sports
people
.
For instance
, scientists can be innovated formulas, medicine, new technology, and so on. For all of
this
, they could be spending more
time
 in their life.
Secondly
, sometimes, military employees lost their lives for the country and the
people
 of the nation, but in the end, they could not be famous and did not gain a high salary.
According to
 me, it is unfair to other field employees because they
also
 do hard work and give
time
 to society and the nation.
For example
, doctors take a high risk to save the life of other
people
 because
people
’s life and alive is more important.
Thus
, others should deserve a higher salary
To conclude
, some
people
 think that successful sports persons can deserve more money than other professionals because it is fair for them
while
 others think that it is unjustified to other professionals. I feel that it is unfair to other sector successful professionals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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