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Most agree that we should be training children to recycle waste to preserve the Earth’s natural resources. However, some believe that it is parents who should teach their children to recycle waste while others feels schools are more responsible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#children #waste #earth’s #resources #believe #parents #schools
Many individuals are accepting that they should implement training
to
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kids
 on recycling garbages to satisfy the need
of
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 preventing
natural
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the natural
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 resources of the Earth. Few of them are
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believing
 that it should
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 by their
parents
itself
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themselves
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 and
other set
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 of humans had an opinion that it should be considered a lot by the
school
 administration.In
this
 essay, I will talk about both of the arguments with supporting examples.In my opinion, schools should teach about recycling
of
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waste
 to the children. Convincing arguments
that
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can be made up of giving seminars about the
process
 of recycling
waste
 like plastics ,wet
waste
 and others. The
kids
 are spending most of
the
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 time in
the
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school
 and every product
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manfactured
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manufactured
 by which chemicals that
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 by the teachers compared to their
parents
.Every
students
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 are literally
understand
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 the benefits ,they can easily categorize the material for recycling based on the chemical factors taught by teachers in
school
.The Government should have awareness
about
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this
 program and they have to put some mandatory extra classes on
this
 to prevent natural resources like coal, oil and
petroleuum
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petroleum
.
On the other hand
, Even though the
kids
 are learning everything from the
school
 on the recycling
process
whereas
 the
parents
 should support their children to implement
this
 in their
day to day
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 activities.
For instance
,
parents
 have to
mange
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manage
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 their home
waste
 by differentiating wet and dry separately
that
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 will be followed by their child as well because it will be helpful for
garbage
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the garbage
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collector
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 to unload
this
 easily for the recycling
process
.As we are in the need of protecting our earth,
the
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plastics are very big harmful to natural elements because
it
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wont
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 decay in
soil
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. In summary, I would concede that
,
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most
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the most
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 essential and important in life to protect
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the earth
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earth
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earth's
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 natural resources from our growing
kids
 should be
practiced
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 or trained by the
school
 administration itself by explaining the
process
 benefits and its effects
to
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 our future.
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