The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

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The table given depicts expenditure on consumer goods in five nations in 2002. It can be inferred from the table that Turkey consumed the maximum volume of food and beverages, at 32.14%, followed by Ireland at 28.91%.

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, the citizens of Sweden spent nearly half of that of Turkey, which was the lowest among all, at 15.77%.

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, Italians purchased the highest amount of shoes, with a share of 6.43%,

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Swedish individuals spent the least, with a percentage of 5.40%. Interestingly, Italians spent nearly 3 times on footwear and clothes as compared to educational

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, at 3.2%.

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, Irish citizens preferred to purchase food and tobacco-related commodities rather than invest in leisure or education. Amongst all, nationalists from Turkey preferred to invest the most in discipline and leisure

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Spanish individuals spent the least number on these

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, it can be concluded that citizens from all the countries spent the bulk of their money on food items & tobacco-related goods,

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they spent the least on

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that improved culture and fitness.

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