A friend of your is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer.He/she has a ask for your advice. write a letter to your friend,In your letter . explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday . describe some possible disadvantages . say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Hi Sam, How are you? Hope

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letter finds you well. I received the note about your first camping trip. I know you have been super busy with your work, and camping is the best way to

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yourself. The site you selected is perfect for the weather

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amazing hike. I am sure you would love the experience. Since the timing is perfect,

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means that there would be many people out

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camping and it may get crowdy. Be prepared to find the right spot and take care of your belongings.

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, since the camp fall under the light-free zone, the organizers do not provide lights, and it gets really dark at night. Make sure you carry enough flashlights with you. I would have loved to join you on

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adventure, but I can't because I am going to India for my sister's wedding. Maybe we can plan another one in September. Have fun and stay safe ! Apoorva

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

166 words

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