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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
In
this
 globalization era, plenty of
choices
 are debatable. On one side, there are some people who believe that statement,
while
 others don't.
This
 essay will discuss why I agree that we, as a modern society, have too many
choices
. The first and main evidence of having plenty of
choices
 is the huge number of advertisement that leads to distraction. It is available
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also
 in
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app
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in
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 our phones.
For example
, when we are searching
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watch
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 our phone. It shows not only in
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the google
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google
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 app, but it's spreading to youtube, shopping
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, and even
instagram
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. On top of that, we can't control all the incoming offers.
Thus
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a huge number
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 and
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 being distractions. The second evidence of having plenty of
choices
 is that we are faced with enough unnecessary
choices
 from time to time.
For example
, students now have over one thousand
schools
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 accessories.
Such
 as rubber, marker, and sticky notes.
However
, those are not
crusial
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crucial
 things to decide. But because we have
to
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platform
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 for
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advertisement
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 we are forced to pick one.
Therefore
, it is appropriate to say that nowadays we have beyond
neccesary
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necessary
choices
. On the other
hands
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, people, who especially live in poor countries, face different problems. They don't have many options even for fulfilling their basic needs.
For example
, people in South Sudan North Africa are not able to get access to food, and medical treatment. In conclusion, I strongly agree that all of us have
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 many options.
In addition
 to that those options
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 from benefiting to risking us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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