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An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, it is very popular to have cosmetic
surgeries
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 that change specific features in our
body
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. There is no doubt that the number of these medical
surgeries
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 keeps increasing significantly. There are many reasons that make
people
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 have these
surgeries
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, but I believe that these operations are very dangerous and can affect you negatively. First of all, at the present time, cosmetic
surgeries
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 have become an escape for
people
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 who do not like the way they look and want to change their appearance. It is important to realize that social media is one of the major effective factors in
people
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's decisions. All of a sudden, everyone is seeking the perfection they want to achieve.
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,
people
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 have been strongly influenced by bloggers and influencers on social media. To put it differently, individuals may have an operation to look like another human because of their beauty.
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, they can adjust different features in their faces to look like a famous actor or an actress. Generally speaking, I believe that having these
surgeries
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 is a big fat mistake.
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, it can affect your health, body and your appearance super badly. Many new methods are being used during these operations which are not good at all for your health.
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, medical errors might happen during these dangerous
surgeries
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 because of the doctors.
Not to mention
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 that
haman
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human
 beings, especially women, have become obsessed
about
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with
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 the way they look and that can make them not
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apply
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think
positive
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 about themselves or not
to
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feel confident.
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, cosmetic
surgeries
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 are fine in some cases.
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, the negative outcome should be taken into account by avoiding these
surgeries
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 and their problems.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Idealized beauty standards
  • Cosmetic surgery
  • Advancements in medical technology
  • Socially acceptable
  • Self-improvement
  • Psychological well-being
  • Competitive workforce
  • Youthful appearance
  • Body dysmorphic disorder (BDD)
  • Physical appearance
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