IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company. why might be this case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed? give your reasons for answer

#people #work #company #case
Self-employed is more popular and
also
choose
Wrong verb form
chosen
show examples
 especially by
Add an article
the worker
a worker
show examples
worker
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
show examples
. For the reason, the
last
 a decade
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
 human lives
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
 expensive so
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
people do not afford to pay
Change preposition
for its
show examples
its
Correct pronoun usage
it
show examples
. These days, it
is commonly believe
Change the verb form
is commonly believed
show examples
 that foremost employees select to be self-employed more than working for
at
Change preposition
apply
show examples
a company. There are some drawbacks so the essay will discuss
problem
Correct article usage
the problem
show examples
 below.
Correct article usage
The first
show examples
First
Add a comma
,First
show examples
 possible disadvantage is communication
skill
Fix the agreement mistake
skills
show examples
eliminate
Wrong verb form
eliminated
show examples
 by that condition.
Moreover
, communication skills
need
Change the form of the verb
needed
show examples
 for each person but
the
Change preposition
in the
show examples
last
 five years the world has
problems
Add a missing verb
had problems
show examples
such
 as a pandemic and a war.
Furthermore
Add a comma
,Furthermore
show examples
 these negative things impact to person and everyone is adapt
the
Change preposition
to the
show examples
 home. Evidence for
this
 appears, some
researchs
Correct your spelling
research
 programs
set
Add a missing verb
are set
show examples
 up every year, one of them for
this
 situation. The
investigation
Change noun form
investigation's
show examples
name is '' How
Pandemic
Correct article usage
the Pandemic
show examples
impacts
Correct your spelling
Impacts
show examples
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
Our
lives
Correct your spelling
Lives
show examples
'' and the article
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
involved
Replace the word
involves
show examples
statistic
Fix the agreement mistake
statistics
show examples
 reports one excellent example of
this
, recent
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
show examples
 a billion people doing activities at the home. For the reason ,the worker
prefer
Change the verb form
prefers
show examples
self-employed
Change preposition
to self-employed
show examples
 and
work
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 particular area like home and restaurant. Obviously, these changes
to be
Change the verb form
are
show examples
suddenly
Change the word
sudden
show examples
 and a huge number
gains
Fix the agreement mistake
gain
show examples
 depressive psychosis. Another drawback is salary
thus
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
self-employment is gained a lot of money. At the same
time
Add a comma
,time
show examples
 they do
work
 and
doing
Wrong verb form
do
show examples
 other activities . The company
supply
Replace the word
supplies
show examples
 salary for workers but the salary
not
Add a missing verb
is not
show examples
 enough for
persons
Replace the word
people
show examples
.
This
 condition sparks
to change
Change the verb form
changes
show examples
work
Change preposition
in work
show examples
position
Fix the agreement mistake
positions
show examples
by
Change preposition
in
show examples
 many people.
For instance
, ''the New York Times " journal mention
this
 drawback and gives
reference
Correct article usage
a reference
show examples
. The journal describes '' why the job change frequently.
The
Correct article usage
Earnings
show examples
earnings
Add a verb
areearnings
wereearnings
show examples
 vital
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
in human lives so every person
select
Correct subject-verb agreement
selects
show examples
job
Correct article usage
a job
show examples
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
independently. In
counclusion
Correct your spelling
conclusion
, I would maintain that
self-employed
Add a missing verb
being self-employed
show examples
 gives a big advantage in
work
Correct article usage
the work
show examples
 area because they do not
depend
Add the preposition
ondepend
show examples
 any employers and any company.
Submitted by asgaarovasif on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • work-life balance
  • constraints
  • traditional job
  • steady income
  • responsibility
  • expertise
  • establishing
  • isolation
  • support network
What to do next:
Look at other essays: