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people are using a lot of online language translation apps .Do the benefits of this outweighs the disadvantages?

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These days it become easier to communicate with other people from different countries without having to learn about their
languages
. Indeed, recently more and more people are using
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language
 translation
apps
 to understand other
languages
.
Although
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 It may help us to communicate more easily when we are travelling abroad, In my opinion, the drawbacks of
this
 development outweigh the benefits. To embark on, with the
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 in transportation and online booking, it now become much easier for everyone to
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travel anywhere in the world.
While
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 accent translation
apps
 might be very handy to use in
this
 situation, there are a few downsides to the increasing usage of these
apps
. First of all, it cause people to avoid learning the
language
 of a nation they are about to visit.
Whereas
, Learning a new
language
 will give us a lot of benefits as we may
also
 learn about their culture. In my opinion, trying to learn the
language
 of the country we are visiting, means that we respect them.
In addition
, a study has revealed that
language
 shapes how we think.
Thus
, understanding a new
language
 might give us insights into how they think, and
therefore
 will help us to understand them better.
Furthermore
, these
apps
 may cause teachers or
language
 instructors to lose their jobs ,especially those who teach foreign
languages
. In conclusion, despite the benefits offered by these
language
 translation
apps
, I believe that we should
also
 continue to learn other
languages
 and not rely too much on these
apps
, because understanding a new
language
 may help us to understand and respect their culture.
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