There have been many technological developments in the 20th century, for example in transport, telecommunications and health. What technological development do you think has been the most important? How has it changed people's lives? Have all the changes been positive?

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In today's

world

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science and technology

have

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made our lives much easier. New discoveries and inventions in the scientific

world

, have a huge impact on

mass

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population. The most beneficial invention of software is "automated intelligence". It has affected most of

young

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generation and has increased

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gap in terms of knowledge.

However

, not all changes have a positive impact on society.

To begin

with, we live in a

computer dominant

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world

where

softwares

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software

have the power to rule

country's

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biggest diplomats.

For example

, the invention of AI software

lead

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diverse development. Automated intelligence is defined as a system that contains all the information in an organised form. Adults, who are working or studying, can benefit from

this

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world

of knowledge.

For instance

, if someone wants to search for a multi-media presentation, he puts a command and AI will solve the query in seconds.

Furthermore

such

robotic

softwares

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software

have a major role in educating young people. Individuals from every profession are using

this

software.

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, teachers and

proffessors

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professors

are making their lectures

from

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using the knowledge given by AI and students are making their assignments with

this

encyclopedia. Before

this

scientic

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scientific

discovery, people used to spend hours

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finding a solution to a problem.

This

has proved to be the fastest way of delivering solutions and has brought a change in

human

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brain.

However

, despite all its positive effects, it has made man dependent on

internet

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and has limited his ability to think. It has reduced

mind's

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creativity and

effects

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our decision-making capability. I believe it has

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drawback of nullifying human's power of reasoning.

To conclude

, technology has made it possible for us to survive in times of economic and cultural recession. Yet, it has paralyzed

human

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brain and reduced our mental capacity

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reasoning.

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There have been many technological developments in the 20th century, for example in transport, telecommunications and health. What technological development do you think has been the most important? How has it changed people's lives? Have all the changes been positive?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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