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Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
computer
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 seem to be
a
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requisite in our daily
life
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 and even
children
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 start to use
computers
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 every day, which has caused some concern from the public. Admittedly, being a frequent user of
computers
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 has its drawbacks.
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, it would be untenable to assert that
daily
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 use of
computers
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 is more negative than positive
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 young
children
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.  Inevitably, using
computers
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 too often can arouse problems, especially
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children’s
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 health. Many
children
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 are now facing deficiency in eyesight and the threat of adiposity, which is mainly caused by the seated lifestyle in front of
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. These problems, though needing our attention, should not shade the light that
computers
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 give to
children
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. Having
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 access to
computers
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 has many positive effects on
children
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, both in study and
life
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.
Computers
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 have become one of the most effective learning devices. Today’s
children
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 can easily gain various learning resources, ranging from fairy tales to the solution to a math problem, with only one click on the screen of their laptops or iPads.
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,
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children’s
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life
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 becomes more
colorful
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 than
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due to
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 the spring of online leisure software like chatting apps and puzzle games, which can develop
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children’s
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 communication skills
as well as
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 their intelligence even without parents’ company.
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, to some extent, the existence of
computers
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 gives
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relief
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 some parents busy with jobs and barely
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 time to accompany their kids.  In a
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, I think
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children’s
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 daily use of
computers
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 has its benefits and values, which cannot be concealed by its drawbacks.
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, some imperative actions should
also
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 be taken to minimize bad effects.
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, computer-using time should be limited and adequate sports should be done in
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children’s
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 daily
life
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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