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These days Internet-based courses have become a popular alternative to university-based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argure that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#courses #alternative #students #type #lectures #argure #study #university
Some sets of individuals believe university programs are not fruitful. They think that the courses available online are more precise and
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 on
job oriented
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 skill development.
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, the majority of employers are giving priority to practical skills over a reputed university degree with minimal real-world knowledge.
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,
job
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 catalogue of reputed organisations like Amazon shows no specific degree criteria and only practical exposure.
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,
students
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 these days prefer saving a hefty fee
tertiary
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 education and are more
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 towards educating themselves online.
On the other hand
, others contradict and believe
univesiry
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university
lecture
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lectures
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 to be essential.
This
 is because
,
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 studying at
unviersity
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university
 includes a lot more than just attending a lecture.
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 as group
assignment
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 and projects, where
student
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students
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learn
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 to work in
co-ordination
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coordination
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 with others and improve their
inter-personal
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interpersonal
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 skills.
Further
,
according to
 them, just securing a job is not the sole objective of life as we need to have many more skills to sustain
in
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ourselves in
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 the industry.
For instance
, an employee may be the best at his core work,
however
, his/her communication and
team work
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teamwork
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 equally matters for his promotion to a managerial level. in my opinion, students should not avoid tertiary education and
also
 pursue some online courses related to their field to strengthen their
practial
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practical
 knowledge.
This
 way they can get the best output
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 their
overall
 investment of time, effort and money.
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