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Some people say that ebooks and modern technology will replace traditional newspaper and magazine.

#people #ebooks #technology #newspaper #magazine
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online study material
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is why few individuals contend that online literature will be
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 option for readers in the near future. I believe that the pace of change depicts that it is quite possible and there are
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 development. To
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, there are a few benefits of reading from
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books
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.Some
people
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 are not comfortable with technology and they become upset by studying from various technical gadgets.
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elderly
people
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who
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spend their whole life reading from paper
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 and it is extremely hard for them to switch
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 pattern of reading at
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 age.
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,traditional
newspaper
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 and magazines don't cause any stress on the eyes of
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the reader
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reader
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readers
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,
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e
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e-books
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books
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 have many harmful impacts on the vision of readers
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 as refractive errors.
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, there are enormous benefits
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 online
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e-books
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e
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e-books
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books
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 are the most
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cost-effective
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cost effective
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, as
people
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 just need
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 internet connection and a subscription of
e library
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,the monthly package of Google
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 which is available online is cheaper than one newspaper or magazine.
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,ebooks don't need any physical facilities to store them and
people
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 can carry an abundance amount of
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 their
smart phones
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,they are not damaged by any physical disaster
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 as rain, storm and fire. In conclusion, I think that even though
people
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 would face difficulties to adjust with ebooks, the future belongs to
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modility
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modality
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 because it is the least expensive and most convenient way to seek knowledge. It is the need of the hour to
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elderly citizens with
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 state-or-the-art opportunity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obsolete
  • ubiquitous
  • environmentally conscious
  • cost-effective
  • technological integration
  • multimedia elements
  • consumer base
  • declining circulation
  • sustainable
  • monetization
  • subscriptions
  • paywalls
  • interactive content
  • digital formats
  • publication
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