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Some people say smacking children is the best way to discipline them. To what extent you agree with this?

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Some people are of
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believe
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 that the best way to instil discipline in
children
 is by smacking them. I disagree with
this
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reasons
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 being that
,
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 it makes the guardian unapproachable, encourages willful disobedience, and sometimes pushes the
children
 to make the wrong friends.
To begin
, beating can make the kids feel like the parents are not approachable, they tend to run away even when there is no threat to be smacked because they are afraid of the outcome,there is no freedom of action and they calculate every move they want to make.
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, a child who gets beaten, will not freely tell the adult he or she lives his or her problem , rather he will want to keep it to
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 or herself or talk to people outside, just because of
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 reaction of the parents. Getting smacked can encourage willful disobedience in the sense that ,
children
 will actually do whatever they like and do
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 of what they are told to do because they believe that
at the end
 of the day, they will be
striked
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.
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 , a child is being caned for playing out late, will to do so knowing what will happen. In conclusion , I believe there are other ways to lovingly correct
children
 , which
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 not
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