In some countries,a few people earn extremely high salaries,some people think that this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn Discuss both views and give your opinion

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and sensitive jobs.the comfort a high salary affords is a strong motivation for

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create a huge financial gap between citizens in the same society creating an unfair balance which can lead to intimidation.

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can lead to inflation,the percentage earning

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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