The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The line graph compares the percentage of
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aged 65 or older in Japan , Sweden ,
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USA from 1940 to 2040.
It is clear that
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the proportion of old
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in each country significantly increases through the decades. By 2040, the percentage of old
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in Japan is predicted to reach the highest point . Between 1940 and 2040, the number of old
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aged 65 and over from the rest of the countries (Sweden and the USA) have a noticeable raise. In 1940, the proportion of old Americans accounted for nearly 10%, compared to around 7% of Swedish
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the following century,
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the population
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from the USA and Sweden are expected to reach just over 20% and 25% respectively.
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