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The given graph gives information about the total students who applied to study in a UK tertiary education since 1999 to 2003 from various countries, Namely (European Nations, Middle east, Fat East and Africa) .

The given graph gives information about the total
number
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 of students who applied to study in a UK tertiary education from 1999 to 2003 from various countries, Namely (
European
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Nations
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, the Middle East,
Fat
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the Fat
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 East and Africa) .
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
number
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 of candidates from
European
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nations
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 decreased over that period.
However
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, the far east rose and reached the highest point
at the end
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 of the given period.
According to
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 the graph in 1999, the total
applicants
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number of applicants
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 for
European
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Nations
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 were at the highest level,
accounted
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accounting
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 for 30000. As for the Far East candidates were half of the
number
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 of
European
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Nations
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.
Then
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, the figure
of
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for
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European
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Nations
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 began to decline and in 2003 was 11000 applicants.
Nevertheless
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,
Far
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the Far
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 East started to rise and there was a significant increase over 4 years
and
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apply
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in 2003, which recorded 30000 applicants. As for Africa, the
number
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 remained stable over the first three years and in 2003 was the lowest country that applied to a UK university, which was 11000.
Furthermore
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,
Middle
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the Middle
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east
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East
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 fluctuated during that period and in the final year reached double
of
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apply
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the first year, which was 2000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 95%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, european, nations with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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