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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant
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The charts
represents
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 the
number
 of
tourist's
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tourist
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 visits in the
last
 7 years. It covers
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the
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span between 2010 to 2017. It includes 2 types of
visitors
 and the total
number
 of visits
such
 as
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
,
visitors
 staying on the
island
 and the total
number
 of
visiting
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visitors
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.
Overall
,
total
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a total
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number
 of
visitors
were
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was
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 the highest in 2017
in contrast
 to
visitors
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the visitors
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 staying on
cruise
ships
were
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was
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 the lowest
number
 in the same year.
To begin
 with, both
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 and
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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were
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scored 1.5 million in 2012 and 2013
consequently
.
In addition
,
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a
the
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number
 of
visitors
 staying on the
island
 were staying constant
in
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from
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 2013
till
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to
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 2015. On top of that,
total
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a total
the total
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number
 of
visitors
were
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was
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 increasing gradually in the mentioned years. In 2011,
visitors
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the visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 was double
visitors
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the visitors
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 staying on
cruise
ships
.
Besides
, both
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 and
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
were
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hit 1.5 million in 2015 and 2016
subsequently
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, cruise, ships, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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