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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant
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represents
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 the
number
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 of
tourist's
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tourist
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 visits in the
last
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 7 years. It covers
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the
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span between 2010 to 2017. It includes 2 types of
visitors
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 and the total
number
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 of visits
such
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 as
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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,
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 and the total
number
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 of
visiting
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.
Overall
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,
total
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a total
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number
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 of
visitors
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were
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 the highest in 2017
in contrast
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 to
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visitors
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the visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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were
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was
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 the lowest
number
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 in the same year.
To begin
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 with, both
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 and
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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were
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scored 1.5 million in 2012 and 2013
consequently
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.
In addition
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,
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a
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number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 were staying constant
in
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from
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 2013
till
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to
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 2015. On top of that,
total
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a total
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number
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 of
visitors
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were
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was
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 increasing gradually in the mentioned years. In 2011,
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visitors
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the visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 was double
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visitors
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the visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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.
Besides
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, both
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 and
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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were
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hit 1.5 million in 2015 and 2016
subsequently
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, cruise, ships, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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