Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays,
the
society believes that many Correct article usage
apply
children
Use synonyms
has
spent most of their Change the verb form
have
time
in a day using phones, Use synonyms
either
it is smartphones or androids. Correct word choice
whether
This
phenomenon happens probably because of Linking Words
lack
of Correct article usage
the lack
Use synonyms
parents'
invigilation and less of outdoor activities Change noun form
parents
provide
by Change the form of the verb
provided
school
. Personally, I think Add an article
the school
this
issue brings Linking Words
negative
development than positive Correct quantifier usage
more negative
one
dealing with Correct pronoun usage
ones
children
's Use synonyms
characters
building and health Change the noun form
character
problem
.
First and foremost, most youngsters spend a great deal Fix the agreement mistake
problems
time
of Use synonyms
their
playing with smartphones because Correct pronoun usage
apply
parents
give little Use synonyms
toward
them. These Change preposition
to
parents
probably spent their Use synonyms
day
Fix the agreement mistake
days
work
hard to earn money and Wrong verb form
working
forget
to nurture their Wrong verb form
forgot
children
. Take as an example, many Use synonyms
parents
who work in urban areas will leave their Use synonyms
children
without invigilation Use synonyms
in
home and free them to access Change preposition
at
internet
. Add an article
the internet
This
Linking Words
then
Linking Words
lead
the Change the verb form
leads
children
to access Use synonyms
netflix
for finding Change the capitalization
Netflix
some
interesting movies, or Correct quantifier usage
apply
event
worst Correct your spelling
even
lead
them t access porn movies. another reason can be there is little Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
extracurricular
Correct your spelling
extracurriculars
provide
by the learning institution which let Wrong verb form
provided
children
Use synonyms
to
have more interaction with their friends. When the Change the verb form
apply
time
comes to go back home, Use synonyms
Linking Words
this
Correct determiner usage
these
children
will Use synonyms
confuse
Wrong verb form
be confused
of
what activities they shall do Change preposition
about
in
home. Change preposition
at
while
they are still underage and have no permission from Linking Words
Use synonyms
parents
to go outside. Correct pronoun usage
their parents
this
problem will lead Linking Words
Linking Words
this youngster
to make agreements with Fix the agreement mistake
these youngsters
the
friends to spend their Change the word
their
time
playing mobile games Use synonyms
such
asLinking Words
,
Free Fire, PUBG, mobile legends, and so on. Remove the comma
apply
Consequently
, they will Linking Words
spent
the entire day Change the verb form
spend
to play
games and Change the verb form
playing
communicate
with friends through mobiles.
In my opinion, Wrong verb form
communicating
this
issue leads to negative improvement Linking Words
for
Change preposition
in
children
's Use synonyms
growing
especially Replace the word
growth
for
their character development. If Change preposition
in
this
phenomenon continuously Linking Words
happen
, it may Change the verb form
happens
causes
the Change the verb form
cause
children
will grow to become an introvert. They will find it convenient to socialise through mobiles and avoid Use synonyms
to have
interactions with other people. Change the verb form
having
This
problem Linking Words
Linking Words
then
will Rephrase
apply
also
cause a few dangerous diseases suffered by Linking Words
children
Use synonyms
such
as early stroke because of radiation resulting from Linking Words
phones
usage.
Change the noun form
phone
To sum up
, I believe that youngsters Linking Words
shall
not Verb problem
should
spent
days only Change the verb form
spend
to interact
through smartphones, neither playing games, watching movies or Change the verb form
interacting
othe
activities. If Correct your spelling
other
this
activity Linking Words
continue
to happen, Change the verb form
continues
then
it will Linking Words
give
Verb problem
have
negative
impact Add an article
a negative
to
Change preposition
on
children
's growth and their health issue.Use synonyms
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