Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays,
the
society believes that many Correct article usage
apply
children
has
spent most of their Change the verb form
have
time
in a day using phones, either
it is smartphones or androids. Correct word choice
whether
This
phenomenon happens probably because of lack
of Correct article usage
the lack
parents'
invigilation and less of outdoor activities Change noun form
parents
provide
by Change the form of the verb
provided
school
. Personally, I think Add an article
the school
this
issue brings negative
development than positive Correct quantifier usage
more negative
one
dealing with Correct pronoun usage
ones
children
's characters
building and health Change the noun form
character
problem
.
First and foremost, most youngsters spend a great deal Fix the agreement mistake
problems
time
of their
playing with smartphones because Correct pronoun usage
apply
parents
give little toward
them. These Change preposition
to
parents
probably spent their day
Fix the agreement mistake
days
work
hard to earn money and Wrong verb form
working
forget
to nurture their Wrong verb form
forgot
children
. Take as an example, many parents
who work in urban areas will leave their children
without invigilation in
home and free them to access Change preposition
at
internet
. Add an article
the internet
This
then
lead
the Change the verb form
leads
children
to access netflix
for finding Change the capitalization
Netflix
some
interesting movies, or Correct quantifier usage
apply
event
worst Correct your spelling
even
lead
them t access porn movies. another reason can be there is little Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
extracurricular
Correct your spelling
extracurriculars
provide
by the learning institution which let Wrong verb form
provided
children
to
have more interaction with their friends. When the Change the verb form
apply
time
comes to go back home, this
Correct determiner usage
these
children
will confuse
Wrong verb form
be confused
of
what activities they shall do Change preposition
about
in
home. Change preposition
at
while
they are still underage and have no permission from parents
to go outside. Correct pronoun usage
their parents
this
problem will lead this youngster
to make agreements with Fix the agreement mistake
these youngsters
the
friends to spend their Change the word
their
time
playing mobile games such
as,
Free Fire, PUBG, mobile legends, and so on. Remove the comma
apply
Consequently
, they will spent
the entire day Change the verb form
spend
to play
games and Change the verb form
playing
communicate
with friends through mobiles.
In my opinion, Wrong verb form
communicating
this
issue leads to negative improvement for
Change preposition
in
children
's growing
especially Replace the word
growth
for
their character development. If Change preposition
in
this
phenomenon continuously happen
, it may Change the verb form
happens
causes
the Change the verb form
cause
children
will grow to become an introvert. They will find it convenient to socialise through mobiles and avoid to have
interactions with other people. Change the verb form
having
This
problem then
will Rephrase
apply
also
cause a few dangerous diseases suffered by children
such
as early stroke because of radiation resulting from phones
usage.
Change the noun form
phone
To sum up
, I believe that youngsters shall
not Verb problem
should
spent
days only Change the verb form
spend
to interact
through smartphones, neither playing games, watching movies or Change the verb form
interacting
othe
activities. If Correct your spelling
other
this
activity continue
to happen, Change the verb form
continues
then
it will give
Verb problem
have
negative
impact Add an article
a negative
to
Change preposition
on
children
's growth and their health issue.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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