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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment.What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Nowadays, humans impact the physical environment in many ways leading to alarming contamination of the Earth so
people
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 need to act responsibly to reduce the damage we are doing to the Earth. The issue stems from several causes to which several solutions will be proposed by
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 and each other in
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 essay. The predominant factor resulting in increasing environmental problems is a great quantity of
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 from human’s daily activities
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 as production, business, services, living, and other activities.
People
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 are creating more
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 than ever before
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 the proliferation of populations, leading to contamination and the
pollution
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 of the Earth, rivers, and oceans. Another worthy cause is air
pollution
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. Most air
pollution
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 which is not natural comes from burning fossil fuels
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 as coal, oil, gas emissions from factories, and exhaust fumes from vehicles
people
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use
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 every day.
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pollution
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 is harmful in high concentrations, or amounts that cause
pollution
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 of the environment. There are potential ways that
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 should adopt to address
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 problem.
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,
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 should enforce strict policies and regulations to control the release of hazardous
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 from industry.
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, they should raise awareness of
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 about environmental issues and give some solutions to
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 followed. It is undeniable that each person can play an important role in protecting the environment.
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 of driving or using personal transportation,
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 can
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 public transportation
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 as trains, buses, and bicycles when
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 go to school or to work to curtail CO2 release.
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,
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 can act on the Three R rules including Reuse, Reduce and Recycle to reduce the amount of
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 generated.
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,
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use
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 are recommended to
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 usable paper bags when going shopping or going to the supermarkets to cut down on plastic bag consumption. In conclusion, various cases lead to environmental issues so
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 and civilians both share equal responsibility over
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 issue to fight for the health of our planet

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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