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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant
The pie charts show the percentage of different sources of news in
Canada
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 and
Australia
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.
Overall
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, the most popular ways to get news in
Australia
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 and
Canada
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 are on the internet and on TV,
whereas
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 the least common ways are the radio and non-specific ways. As we can see, Australians mostly trust online media and more than half population uses
this
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 source (52%),
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 only 36% of Canadians usually prefer the internet. In
Australia
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 television takes second place in popularity and has an audience of about 37% of inhabitants, at the same time, in
Canada
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 TV is the most-rated source of information (40% of the audience). The radio is unpopular
media
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 in both countries and takes only 2% in
Australia
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 and 7% in
Canada
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. Canadians are more conservative people and they use twice more papers and magazines than Aussies (14% and 7% respectively). And the least informative way to get news for all is the non-specific sources (3% for
Canada
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 and 2% for
Australia
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).

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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