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Band 4.5

Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree?

A wide range of people
believes
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believe
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 that having a
car
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 has more cons than pros. I will discuss these points of view with arguments in the following paragraphs. From my point of view, having a
car
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 is convenient and has a lot of benefits, much more than downsides. First of all, a
car
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 gives freedom of movement in most parts of the world and
frequently is
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 the only available kind of
transport
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.
Secondly
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, the
car
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 is the cheapest kind of
transport
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 and doesn’t need a big infrastructure to use.
For example
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, in rural areas where
non-cost-effective
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cost-effective
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 to build a railway or another public
transport
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, the
car
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 is the most popular way of transporting people and different stuff. Of course, cars
also
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 have cons and the main
of
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one of
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 them is the
exhausts
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exhaust
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of
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from
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 fuel burnable. It influences the health of people who live in big
cities
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 and could be the reason for many illnesses. Another one is parking in big
cities
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, especially in old
cities
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 with old
infrastructure
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infrastructure,
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 where unreal to build a lot of parking places.
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, if the city doesn’t have convenient public
transport
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, using cars usually provokes traffic jams.
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, in my home city
Krasnoyarsk
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, Krasnoyarsk
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, there is no underground or tram, only
the
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apply
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buses, and citizens prefer to have their own
car
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 because it is more comfortable to stay in a traffic jam in a
car
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 than in a public bus. In conclusion, I would say that the pros
or
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and
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 cons of cars depend on the area of living. In
cities
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 with developing infrastructure and public
transport
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 is no need to have a
car
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, but far from the
cities
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car
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, car
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 is the most popular option.

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task management
Make one view clear in the intro and keep it through the essay.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show order: first, next, finally.
content
Add simple, concrete examples to back each point.
grammar
Check grammar on small phrases to avoid mistakes, like 'not cost-effective' and 'unrealistic'.
task response
Clear basic idea of the topic and a view on the issue.
linguistic
Good use of everyday language and simple terms.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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