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The flow chart depicts the problems associated with cutting down forests.

The flow chart depicts the problems associated with cutting down forests.
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The flow chart depicts the disadvantages related to deforestation.
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, the Clear cutting down of forests caused four main problems: Flooding,
top soil
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 erodes, less biodiversity, and increased drought. Several stages cause flooding. The first is because heavy logging equipment compresses the land and makes soil hard and baked, the rain comes, and flooding happens. The other disadvantage is less biodiversity. It is caused because of some conditions. The first scenario is fewer roots holding the soil's top become eroded. The next condition when the risk of burning is increased includes natural and accidental events and waste wood from logging crushed, Microo-organisms lost their food.
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, key species move in, and some vegetation is gone. The
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 condition has some stage, the plants do not release moisture into the air, and precipitation becomes less and increases drought around the forest land.
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, deforestation is the worst because causing some unbalanced conditions, namely less biodiversity and flooding.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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