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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.... Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money
Nowadays,
job
 satisfaction became a controversial issue.
Although
, there are some people who agree to do
the
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job
that is
 unsatisfactory in terms of money.
While
 other groups of society argue that if you try more and hope for the best conditions could be better. In my view, I believe that, having a better opportunity only lies with keeping the try attitude. To commence with, in terms of individuals who do
the
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apply
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unsatisfactory jobs have many reasons.
Firstly
, they don't wait for the long term for having the best opportunity. Their families depend on them and they can fulfil basic needs through that
job
. It is better to do a
job
 on a small package rather than
unemployed
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.
Furthermore
, a person gets much experience with the accommodation and enhances his communication skills and became extrovert
For instance
,if a child does
the
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job
 part-time in a restaurant at low wedges will become independent and support his family
as well as
 makes new contact with society and get experience with work.
On the other hand
, there are groups of people who argue to work hard to achieve goals in their lives.if they work hard on improving their skills they get better opportunities
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jobs with attractive salary packages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contentment
  • Resilience
  • Personal growth
  • Endurance
  • Initiative
  • Advancement
  • Catalyst
  • Financial stability
  • Status quo
  • Innovation
  • Missed opportunities
  • Life satisfaction
  • Adverse situations
  • Taking control
  • Risk assessment
  • Change management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivation
  • Stagnation
  • Proactivity
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