To achieve international sporting success, many countries build specialized facilities for the training of top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

To achieve sporting achievement in the world, most
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countries
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contracted
facilities
for the training of athletes
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sports
facilities
that everyone can consume. In my opinion, it has been developing
dramaticly
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dramatically
in
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two decades and effect myriad tournaments but it has both
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.
fisrtly
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, there are
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of
facilities
that
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built by governments
such
as athletes, basketball and so on
furthermore
, these specific places can effect
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because if the number of
facilities
increases rapidly, it will
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finance in many
countries
specially developing
countries
.
In addition
,
athlete
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is the most effective sport in the world because it has provided a lot of new
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to set up
another sport
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.
Moreover
,
technology
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that can be used for tournaments is
also
increasing.
On the other hand
, banning sites that everybody can use is not
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the successful
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way because if individuals can not consume the facility that has
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of
sports
, it will decrease in my opinion.
For example
, the main point is in order to attract attention from
veiwers
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viewers
to treat finance.
Moreover
, attracting attention is necessary to establish new competition but, nowadays, some
countries
organize a competition in
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the sport
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sport
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without
veiwers
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viewers
due to
pandemic
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.
To sum up
,
in
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the
beginnig
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beginning
of the 20th century, sporting
facilities
has
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been surging significantly so most people can watch a tournament on the television or
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smart phone
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. In my opinion, technology is vital for every
sports
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as every
sports
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is established by technology.
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