Nowadays many people believe that inspite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

Agriculture has evolved over the years, partly
due to
the advancement in the equipment used by
farmers
.
However
, different
researches
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shows that despite the new inventions in the agricultural world, many individuals still suffer at the hands of starvation, in
the
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developing and underdeveloped countries.
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the reasons for
food
unavailability and give an insight
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the solution
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this
rising problem.
To begin
with, there are multiple factors contributing
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the deficency
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deficency
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deficiency
of
food
intake.
Firstly
,
economy
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the economy
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of the world has revolutionized over the past few years.
Economic
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recession has led to the inflation of market prices. The annual budget allocated for farming has
reduced
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over the years.
As a result
,
farmers
sale
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their
crop
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crops
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at
an
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extravagant
price
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prices
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and middle-class consumers suffer from the lack of affordability of
food
items.
Secondly
, farming has been affected by changing weather conditions.
This
unpredicitability
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unpredictability
is
due to
global warming,
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has increased variation in weather
condition
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conditions
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.
For instance
, rice crop needs
ample
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amount of water to survive.
Last
year, in Pakistan,
depletion
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the depletion
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of rainfall led to
destruction
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the destruction
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of the crop and greatly reduced
outcome
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outcomes
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for the
farmers
. These issues can be addressed if people start growing their crops more wisely.
Firstly
, economic growth is needed to make
ammends
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amends
. Government should spend more capital on farming techniques and
reduction
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in farming
cost
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costs
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will lead to
food
availabilty
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availability
and affordability.
Moreover
, using weather
forecast
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forecasts
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, before incorporating
plant
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plants
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into the soil can be lucrative for
farmers
and results in better output.
To conclude
changes are needed at national and local levels. Planning and
oraganising
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organising
organizing
new methods of farming is necessary before executing the process of farming. Government should make
budget friendly
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policies that can cause growth in agriculture. More people can benefit from these policies.
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