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Computers do not help children learn more effectively. On the contrary the use of computer has a negative effect on children’s physical and mental development. Do you agree or disagree?

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Undoubtedly, after globalization,
children
's learning has been updated, and computers are frequently used at school or home to support studying.
As a consequence
, many adults believe that electronics are not beneficial for kids and can contribute to the development of mental disorders
such
 as anxiety and stress. In my mind, like everything, computers can be used smartly by teachers and
parents
 in
children
's learning,
however
, the lack of control is becoming individuals dependent on
devices
.
To begin
 with, the interconnected world has impacted every family around the globe, and regardless of age, individuals now carry smartphones in their hands.
According to
 BBC Brazil, every Brazilian has at least one smartphone and spends an average of 8 hours per day browsing websites or social media on their device.
This
 is concerning, the Association of Kids in Brazil are struggling deeply for controlling the use of technology
devices
 at school and providing several meetings to
parents
 for transferring these
devices
 to the home.
Furthermore
, many families are struggling to spend time with their
children
, who only want to have fun in front of screens. In some cases,
children
 become extremely aggressive when
parents
 try to take away their
devices
.
According to
 The New York Times, around 80% of
children
 who have had access to technology
devices
 since the age of 3 or younger
have
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 a high risk of becoming dependent on electronic
devices
 at a young age.
Hence
, controlling the access to
children
's
devices
 must be done by
parents
, and participating in
children
's lives
such
 as kidding on the street, square or at least going to a shopping mall will help them to try real-life, regardless the boosting of the relationship among
children
, fathers, and mothers . In conclusion, like everything, freedom could be dangerous and need to be controlled, so keeping contact with some technology
devices
 should help
their
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them
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develop
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development
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.
Thus
, a successful
children
's life is on
parents
' responsibility.
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