In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is argued that government should
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tax
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on fast
food
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items
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because these are causing
health
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problems
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of
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most people in some areas. I completely agree with the statement. There are a number of reasons I believe
Jung
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food
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has detrimental effects on our
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body
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. One possible reason is
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obesity is one of them. As
this
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food
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has high protein and
calorie
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calories
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, they are lately burned by our
body
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.
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, it creates
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fat and damages our
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shape. Another reason is that heart
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and pressure can be caused for adopting
this
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food
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.
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,
this
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food
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contains harmful chemicals which will affect our blood circulation and
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will cause those diseases.
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, it harms our capability of
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body's
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antibiotics.
The fast
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food
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has a plethora of dangerous elements which
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to fight against bacteria and
it
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will cause death in future.
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, the Daily Star newspaper published that 70%
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and students caused various
type
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types
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of
health
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problems
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because they addicted to fast
food
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items
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such
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ad
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as
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pizza,
burger
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burgers
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etc which are easy to take and responsible price.
However
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, my opinion is that
tha
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the
authorities should
increase
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the
tax
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on
the
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process
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food
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. First of all, if government
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the
tax
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on
this
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food
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, people will avoid
to buy
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it and will take
home made
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homemade
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foods which are healthy and good for our life.
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,
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seller
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sellers
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will decrease the sales of fast
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items
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because the price of elements will
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which are
using
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in fast
food
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cuisines.
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, the city of Agra which is situated in India
,
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has increased the price of fast
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because of
the
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government instructions and
then
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most fast
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food's
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food
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shop sellers are moving the cuisine of vegetables and fruits
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shop
instead
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of fast
food
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items
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Therefore
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,
health
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problems
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issue on that country
are
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are
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dropping day by day. In conclusion, considering the factors discussed
about
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. I believe if the administration takes some strict steps about it
such
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as higher
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tax
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taxes
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, will solve people's
health
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problems
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with
outstanding
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an outstanding
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result
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results
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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