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Some people think that children should only read academic books. Others believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people are adamant that offspring should only read
an academic records
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academic records
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,
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 others think that reading report for entertainment is equally significant. In my opinion, I believe that academic
books
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 for reading are paramount,
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nevertheless
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 fiction
books
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 are equally necessary too. On the one hand, academic
books
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 have an inevitable place in
children
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’s life. Thanks to academic
books
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children
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 enlarge their world outlook and become well-developed students, which affects their school achievements directly.
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, continuous reading of academic
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 may provide them with theoretically needed information about the environment, math, engineering and etc.
On the other hand
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,fiction literature is equally vital for self-development, to recognize and conceive all materials deeply. Reading for pleasure gives additional spiritual power to
children
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 and absorbs all the detailed information in the article.
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, reading for pleasure instructs
children
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 to execute all known information into practice, which allows them to overcome obstacles easily. I strongly believe that reading academic
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 increase the scientific level of
children
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, at the same time reading for pleasure is paramount of importance. Reading in an academic sphere may develop
children
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 one-sided, which is not enough to compete in today’s world.
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 , reading on both sides up-bring
children
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 as completed and ready for heavy examines in life. In conclusion, I accept the importance of academic
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,
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 I strongly advise adding
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for
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to
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children
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’s library fiction
books
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 to encourage them to fantasy all their educational materials and pass easily all their home-works and university life difficulties.
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