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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effects on families, individuals and the society. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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Food
 which we had as traditional type is now being vanished by international fast
food
 in many regions.
Consequently
, it becomes a major problem for families, people and the public. I strongly agree with
this
 notion of the replacement of usual
food
 with fast
food
 leads to some effects on all individuals.
However
, it
also
 requires a balanced diet to maintain good
health
.
Firstly
, On preparing home
food
 will have all kinds of nutrients with good taste. We can stay healthy
while
 having the prepared
food
 and we can have it
together with
 families where we will spend some quality time with them. Different country foods pattern will get vary from our foods and it won't be suited for many elders in the family but it will be tastier comparatively and it leads serious cause to the people's
health
.
For instance
, Preservatives like many
food
 chemicals has added to fast
food
 for taste and to attract the younger generation.
Secondly
, As we started to have fast
food
 as a meal in countries like USA, UK, etc . As per the WHO record, the regions who is having that kind of
food
 will be at the top of the record across the globe. Even children are suffered from many issues at an early stage because cooking time-consuming humans in some communities are preferring and like to have fast
food
 as a meal to make it simpler but not healthy. In summary, I would concede that
,
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 Eating a meal is very important in our life to have better growth in the body , happiness and
health
. Having
food
 as fast meal is not good for our
health
 and the Government should ban some unhealthy preservatives so that we can prevent some diseases in future.
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