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Housing is a basic necessity for everyone. Therefore, governments must provide free housing to those who cannot afford it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that recent changes in attitude towards housing have raised the question of whether or not
government
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 should provide housing
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those who are in need. In my opinion, though
this
 trend has a few drawbacks, the benefits it may bring to
people
 in life are tremendous. In my view, free housing provided by
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 might prove advantageous. The first reason is more closely associated with the fact that it reduces homelessness.
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 everyone can have access to safe and affordable housing, it improves their living conditions. Having provided accommodation for
people
, governments will have an opportunity to boost their economy. Providing free housing can help to stimulate the economy by creating jobs in the construction and maintenance of housing units.
This
,
as a result
, can lead
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 reduction of
poverty
 and inequality.
On the other hand
, I can empathize with those who believe that providing houses for
people
 at no cost can be a waste of
government
 funds. The main factor for
that is
 it can create a culture of dependency.
This
 is because
instead
 of taking responsibility,
people
 solely rely on the
government
 to provide them with housing free of charge. Another important argument is it may not address the causes of
poverty
 and inequality. More clearly, there are other more significant factors that can give rise to the nation's
poverty
such
 as lack of education, job opportunities, social support and most importantly food and water shortages.
For instance
, nowadays the world has a huge water deficit because of
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population growth which is sentencing millions of
people
 to hydrological
poverty
 and
that is
 difficult to escape. In conclusion,
although
 there are some valid arguments against
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 providing free houses, I completely support
this
 idea for several practical reasons.
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