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Housing is a basic necessity for everyone. Therefore, governments must provide free housing to those who cannot afford it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that recent changes in attitude towards housing have raised the question of whether or not
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 should provide housing
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those who are in need. In my opinion, though
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 trend has a few drawbacks, the benefits it may bring to
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 in life are tremendous. In my view, free housing provided by
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 might prove advantageous. The first reason is more closely associated with the fact that it reduces homelessness.
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 everyone can have access to safe and affordable housing, it improves their living conditions. Having provided accommodation for
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, governments will have an opportunity to boost their economy. Providing free housing can help to stimulate the economy by creating jobs in the construction and maintenance of housing units.
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, can lead
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 reduction of
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 and inequality.
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, I can empathize with those who believe that providing houses for
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 at no cost can be a waste of
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 funds. The main factor for
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 it can create a culture of dependency.
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 of taking responsibility,
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 solely rely on the
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 to provide them with housing free of charge. Another important argument is it may not address the causes of
poverty
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 and inequality. More clearly, there are other more significant factors that can give rise to the nation's
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 as lack of education, job opportunities, social support and most importantly food and water shortages.
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, nowadays the world has a huge water deficit because of
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population growth which is sentencing millions of
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 to hydrological
poverty
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 difficult to escape. In conclusion,
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 there are some valid arguments against
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 providing free houses, I completely support
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 idea for several practical reasons.

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