Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Financial subsidies are the most common
methods
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for wealthy
countries
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to solve
poverty
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issues in other nations,
however
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, the situation barely changed. Despite
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countermeasures could
achive
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achieve
short-term goals, there are better means of solution to cope with
poverty
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,
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, I strongly agree with
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opinions. On the one hand, there are various drawbacks derived from offering financial support to poor
countried
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countries
,
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a
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corrupt
corrupted
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using
money
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for their own benefits
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and
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residents
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to struggle under
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poverty
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the poverty
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line.
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, Congo is known as one of the
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regions in the world, despite many advanced
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such
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as the USA
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million
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and thousands
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their
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annually, the situation remained unchanged these years.
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to say, the financial support from rich
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is fail
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to cope with
poverty
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.
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, there are some means of solutions for
poverty
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that could derive a
profoundly
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achivement
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achievement
. First of all, advanced
countries
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could cultivate local residents with
necessary
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skills , allowing people from poor families to have better job opportunities to break the cycle of
poverty
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.
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,
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government
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in Taiwan sent many professional
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to many
countries
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in Africa to teach them the knowledge of agriculture to help local
farmer
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farmers
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to
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increase their
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.
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, it is better to assist local
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to improve
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local construction, including
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the transportation
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system
instead
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of just
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money. It could not only provide a convenience to local residents but could attract more visitors from overseas. To summarise, I strongly agree with the suggestion that rich
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should not provide only money to solve
poverty
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since
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methods barely
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anything. It is time to implement other ways, including providing education or help with their local construction, to make real differences
on
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current
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situation.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay addresses the topic but fails to develop a fully coherent argument. The introduction does not clearly state your position. Ensure that each paragraph contains a clear main idea and that supporting sentences relate directly to it. Work on making a clear and logical flow of ideas from introduction to conclusion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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