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Some people think that spending a lot of money on wedding parties and other celebrations is just a waste. Others, however, think that such events are necessary, so spending money on them is acceptable. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #money #parties #celebrations #waste #events
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In the current world, most
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people
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 like to celebrate any special occasion by inviting a lot of
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. The discussion that throwing too much
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 to hold
parties
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 like
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, marriage or any other special event is a debatable one, with strong
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 provided by the supporters of both
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views. A few argue that
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special events need to be celebrated grandly, as it happens only a few times in a lifetime.
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people
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 want to have the memory of that event until their
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neighbours are invited. By spending limited
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, it is almost impossible to achieve something special which will be remembered forever.
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 towards
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 point of view.
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 believe that it is not right to spend a huge amount
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money
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 on personal celebrations as there are a lot of
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 across the globe under starvation.
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African countries, many
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 do not even have food to eat for a single meal a day. In case, the
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 spent on
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 can be sent to the
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 who are really in need, definitely, a lot of life can be saved.
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, it is clear why a few individuals refute
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high spending
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. Considering the memories of special occasions
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parties
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 has been supported and refuted by many. Even though memories of some special events are important, saving human life from starvation is more important.
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, in my opinion, it is necessary to cut down the spending on
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 and spend that
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poor
people
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’s food.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extravagant
  • waste of money
  • financial burden
  • priorities
  • materialistic values
  • unrealistic expectations
  • special occasion
  • celebration
  • strengthening relationships
  • social bonds
  • boosting local economies
  • creating jobs
  • lasting memories
  • financial responsibility
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