IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The map given below shows the plan for reconstruction of the second floor of Mason's Building. Summarize.

The map given below shows the plan for reconstruction of the second floor of Mason's Building. Summarize.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The map provides the architectural
layout
Use synonyms
plan
Use synonyms
 for the rebuilding of the second floor by constructing with a few additional changes. Previously, the constructed
layout
Use synonyms
 was bifurcated into different portions of the house but the current
plan
Use synonyms
 is curated to provide more space and accommodate guests. The old
plan
Use synonyms
 consisted of a kitchen
along with
Linking Words
 a dining area and living room,
while
Linking Words
 it
also
Linking Words
 included two small bedrooms and one spacious
bedroom
Use synonyms
. In the new
layout
Use synonyms
plan
Use synonyms
, the kitchen is replaced as a master
bedroom
Use synonyms
, the spacious
bedroom
Use synonyms
 is made into a guest room, and the
bedroom
Use synonyms
 on the southeast corner is now the studio storage,
while
Linking Words
 the other
bedroom
Use synonyms
 on the northwest corner is the laundry room. The dining area is now the studio seating
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 and the living area is the studio.
Overall
Linking Words
, the rooms have been used for different purposes through the
layout
Use synonyms
plan
Use synonyms
 has remained the same. Few changes have been made to the stair landing and the bathroom remains as it is.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words layout, plan, bedroom with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: