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Scientists say that in the future humanity will speak the same language. Do you think the advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a possibility that in the future humanity will speak the same
language
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. There has been a lot of debate going on about the positives and the negatives of
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 I will be giving my opinion on whether the advantages of having only
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language
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 outweigh the disadvantages of
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 probability. The negative side of having a universal
language
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 is losing big parts of heritage from a lot of different places all over the world.
Language
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 is an important part of a culture. It is a very unique feature that can tell a lot about the people that use it.
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, expressions and mannerisms often can be a reflection of events that the speaker's ancestors
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faced.
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 can be helpful not even for research purposes but can help
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 reunite with their homeland,
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and cultural
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 roots or help to understand their national identity,
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 more comfortable in their own skin.
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,
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 more argument why variety speeches is a positive thing is that learning a new
language
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 can be a great way to exercise
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's brain which can expand
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's worldview, especially around the topic of cultural diversity, improve
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memory, concentration and listening skills. Learning a new way of expression can be an interesting hobby or a dream for quite a few people around the globe.
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, having
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language
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 universally would make communicating much easier and quicker and the spare time could be used to learn some other skill. All in all, I think that the variety of different speeches and
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 positive sides do not fall behind having
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 universal
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. Diversity is beautiful and in
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 day and
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 I believe we should treasure our
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as well as
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 others' way of speaking.
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