Some people think that children should learn to design and make things in school. Others believe that there are better things to learn. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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my
favorite
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film
. I am really passionate about 90e’s
20 century
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movies, it is
such
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great
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a great
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era for cinematography.
Best
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films of
this
time
in my opinion
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is Titanic,
Brave heart
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Braveheart
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, Forest
gamp
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,
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Fiction but
best
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the best
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of the best is The Shawshank Redemption. We would
watched
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this
film
every summer with my brother and when I watched
this
film
first
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time. I used to be so inspired and
happie
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happy
happier
.
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is
drama
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a drama
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genre movie with great montage and aesthetics, based
of
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stiphen
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Stephen
king
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novel story about friendship, freedom and redemption.
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Stephen
king
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was involved as
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one of the
script writers
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scriptwriters
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and
adviser
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advisers
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of the movie.
Plot
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of the
film
takes place in the 20th century and
tell
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tells
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us about a
suscessfull
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successful
young layer Andy Dufrein
he
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is
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pratogonist
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protagonist
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film
. Because of
coincidence
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he was accused of killing his wife and her lover. The story pass
throuh
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through
decades the story got a lot of
twist
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and turns,
sympolism
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symbolism
and subtext.
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Protagonists
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film
are
penitentiary
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a penitentiary
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system of
usa
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USA
and her archetype director of the prison.
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of the
film
is of the greatest in cinematography and I see
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juxtposition
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juxtaposition
juxtapositions
between
most
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unfree place in the world and
place
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a place
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of
absolut
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absolute
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freedom Zihuatanejo.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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