the chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in newport city centre from 2003-2012
The line chart gives information that the number of
incidents
of burglary
, car
theft
and robbery
in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. This
shows the amount
of crime changes in three categories Change the quantifier
number
through out
10years.
For Correct your spelling
throughout
burglary
, in 2003, under 3500 incidents
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
happened
. It was Change the form of the verb
happening
contrast
with the number of Change preposition
in contrast
robbery
, Change to a plural noun
robberies
that
was over 500 Correct pronoun usage
which
incidents
. Also
, car
theft
cases
were between 2500 to 3000. In 2004, burglary
crimes
were
increased between 3500 to 4000, Unnecessary verb
apply
it
was a peak above them. Correct pronoun usage
which
On the other hand
, car
theft
was
slightly decreased to 2000 Unnecessary verb
apply
cases
in 2006. Burglary
crimes
were
dramatically decreased to Unnecessary verb
apply
low
peak in 2008, but Correct article usage
a low
it's
Replace the word
its
cases
were rised
a little bit to under 1500 in 2012. As Correct your spelling
raised
car
Change preposition
for car
theft
, after the moment of lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
cases
, it also
rebounded to over 2500 cases
in 2012. For robbery
theft
from the person, it was generally the lowest counts
of three of them, but it was at least 500 Fix the agreement mistake
count
crimes
in 2008 but also
grew between 500 to 1000 numbers of cases
in 2012.
Above all
, from 2003 to 2012, robbery
was the minimun
Correct your spelling
minimum
Correct quantifier usage
number of incidents
incidents
of three Fix the agreement mistake
incident
crimes
and burglary
was the highest crimes
until between 2006 to 2007, and after that Fix the agreement mistake
crime
car
theft
went over burglary
and it was the highest amount of crime in Newport city centre until 2012.Submitted by nursemk1991 on
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