The diagram below shows the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004.

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The diagram illustrates the overview of a

school

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before and after the plan to change it between

years

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the years

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2004 and 2024.

Overall

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it is clear that

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there are more students and a new building in 2024 compared to the

amount

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number

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of students in 2004. In ,addition there are

also

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some changes on the road out of

school

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composing. As it is given it is planned that 1000 more students will be at

school

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in 2024 so there will be a third

school

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building on the west side

instead

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of the sports field,

than

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then

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the sports ground moves to the opposite

site

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side

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on the south of the campus, there is

also

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a new car park beside the building number 3

at the end

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. Another change will be on the way to building number 1 and 2, there will be a new connective path between these two old buildings, as it is visible the structure of the main road to the

school

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will

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be different in the new plan but there will not be any changes on the number of trees.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

180 words

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