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The maps underneath displays the differences that have made way at the sea side resort Templeton during the fifteen year period.

The maps underneath displays the differences that have made way at the sea side resort Templeton during the fifteen year period.
The maps underneath
displays
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display
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 the differences that have made way at the
sea side
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seaside
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 resort Templeton during the
fifteen year
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fifteen-year
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 period.
Overall
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, a comparison of
two
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the two
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 maps reveals changes from a small village to
urban
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an urban
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 landscape. In 1990
town
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the town
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 was much
more
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apply
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greener places with a lot amount of trees
among
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in
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 all ways but in the next 25 years have witnessed a number of horrifyingly. The most
noticeably
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noticeable
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 change to mention is that most of the trees along to hospital and railway were
choped
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chopped
 down and replaced by new houses.
However
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, houses underneath the supermarket, that built
during
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for
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 fifteen years
was replaces
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was replaced
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 by residential buildings. There was constructed
a
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apply
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new supermarket between two ways.
Also
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, there was built another building between the lake and
river
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the river
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. Another thing to mention, there was constructed factory situated south-west
to
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of
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railway
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the railway
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, that replaced trees,
besides
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 the railway has been extended by
new
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a new
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scretch
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scratch
stretch
 running directly from
west
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the west
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 under the sea.
Also
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, a single
houses
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house
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that
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apply
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situated at the corner between two ways at the river was deconstructed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "displays" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "differences" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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