In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Humans had a similar
diet
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for thousands of years.
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, the
last
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50 years have seen a radical change in our
diet
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and the consequences have not gone amiss. Governments are embattled in health issues of their citizens and no one seems to know what to do. Yet, the solution is not beyond us. Nowadays a plethora of fast
food
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are
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easily reachable in the majority of cities. It represents a viable option for
low-middle class
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families to eat a warm dish outside the monotony of eating
home cooked
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food
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at
cheap
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price. Governments should face the possibility of imposing
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higher taxation considering every aspect of
this
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social problem,
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sustaining financially healthy fast foods, replacing in a constructive way the incalculable amount of junk
food
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that is
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currently swallowed by millions of people. The impact derived
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the exceeding consumption of fatty and salty
food
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is a burden for the collectivity. As a matter of fact,
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a vicious
diet
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leads to many terrible diseases
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as; diabetes and arterial occlusion. These can be
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pathologies that have to be treated for long periods, sometimes with the need
of
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hospitalisation.
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result
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the money needed to provide
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proper sanitary assistance to all these ill people is outstandingly high.
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, undoubtedly governments should take some sturdy decisions about it,
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respecting people’s
need
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and freedom and giving options and incentives to poor people in order to allow them to be able to provide a healthy
diet
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to their families and dear ones, for their health and for
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good.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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