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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Life is regarded as an adventure and some people believe that taking
risks
 in our work and daily lives is important to us.
While
 I must acknowledge that taking
risks
 can bring disadvantages to some extent, I do agree that it can deliver far more benefits than we can imagine. On the one hand, the disadvantages of taking
risks
 in our lives are beyond dispute. First of all, it can be harmful to our mental health. When we step into the unknown, we can be overwhelmed by all sorts of stimuli that we haven't encountered before, which can lead to stress. Aaron Antonovsky's theory suggests that being under constant stress may damage human health.
Secondly
,
risk
 means that we do not know the outcome. We run the
risk
 of losing everything we currently have, and a great deal of time could be wasted.
Furthermore
, we are all interconnected, so when we take
risks
, it may have an impact on others.
For example
, parents will definitely be worried about their children.
On the other hand
, I do believe that the merits of
risk
-taking cannot be simply measured in terms of value. When we step out of our comfort zone, we can see more possibilities and have a bigger picture by getting rid of the limitations we have set for ourselves. We may lose the life balance for a
while
, but we have the opportunity to reacquaint ourselves with the resources we already have.
Risk
 is
also
 an impetus as we are pushed to do more self-reflection and introspection, through which we can discover what really matters to us. People cannot know that their previous job is not appropriate for them unless they make the decision to take a
risk
 and give themselves a brand new beginning. In conclusion, the drawbacks of
risk
-taking cannot be ignored, but I do think that taking a leap of faith in our lives is worthwhile. The advantages it brings will not disappoint us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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