Write a letter to the organizer of an annual festival that you attended last year. Include - Feedback about last year - An offer to volunteer - Questions about the festival

#organizer #year #feedback #offer #volunteer #questions

Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter with

regards

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to the DogSpot fest I attended

last

year in Toronto in the month of February. First of all, I would like to

congratualte

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congratulate

you

for

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the

huges

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huge

success of the event. I would

also

like to appreciate the arrangements made. Despite a huge gathering, the crowd was

well managed

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by the volunteers and

thr

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the

organizing committee.

Also

, the panel discussion was very informative for pet parents. I am a dog trainer by profession, and I would like to participate as a volunteer in the next planned festival. I can help deliver sessions on dog training for

fist-time

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pet parents. I can

also

help you connect with large media companies who could cover the fest in leading newspapers and help us gain

the

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visibility.

Lastly

, I had

few

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question

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questions

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listed below regarding the event: - How and when was the first DogSpot show hosted? - Do you

also

organize

this

event in any other city other than Toronto? - What is the ultimate goal for DogSpot in future? Looking forward to hearing back from you on the questions. Yours faithfully Apoorva

Submitted by apoorva.badola on Tue Apr 11 2023

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

10 paragraphs

189 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Write a letter to the organizer of an annual festival that you attended last year. Include - Feedback about last year - An offer to volunteer - Questions about the festival

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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