Write a letter to the organizer of an annual festival that you attended last year. Include - Feedback about last year - An offer to volunteer - Questions about the festival

#organizer #year #feedback #offer #volunteer #questions

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter with

regards

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to the DogSpot fest I attended

last

year in Toronto in the month of February. First of all, I would like to

congratualte

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congratulate

you

for

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the

huges

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huge

success of the event. I would

also

like to appreciate the arrangements made. Despite a huge gathering, the crowd was

well managed

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by the volunteers and

thr

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the

organizing committee.

Also

, the panel discussion was very informative for pet parents. I am a dog trainer by profession, and I would like to participate as a volunteer in the next planned festival. I can help deliver sessions on dog training for

fist-time

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pet parents. I can

also

help you connect with large media companies who could cover the fest in leading newspapers and help us gain

the

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visibility.

Lastly

, I had

few

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question

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listed below regarding the event: - How and when was the first DogSpot show hosted? - Do you

also

organize

this

event in any other city other than Toronto? - What is the ultimate goal for DogSpot in future? Looking forward to hearing back from you on the questions. Yours faithfully Apoorva

Submitted by apoorva.badola on Tue Apr 11 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

10 paragraphs

189 words

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Write a letter to the organizer of an annual festival that you attended last year. Include - Feedback about last year - An offer to volunteer - Questions about the festival

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is positive or negative development?

Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world,Others feel that these organizations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based Discuss both sides and give your own view.

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Task 1 The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.