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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004
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The given line graph depicts information about how much
fish
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 and three different kinds of
meat
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 were consumed in the
period
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 of 25 years starting from 1979.
Overall
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, it is evident that chicken was the leading kind of
meat
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 in its
consumption
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, whilst beef, lamb, and
fish
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 saw a decrease in the same
period
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.
Additionally
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, the lowest
consumption
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 rate was
fish
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 compared with the other figures. Looking at the rate of beef and lamb in more detail, it is clear from the graph that both these kinds of
meat
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 witnessed a massive decrease from 1979 to 2004. Despite a fluctuating trend in the
consumption
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 of beef in the first
period
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, it fell dramatically almost 2 times compared to 1979. Meanwhile, lamb
meat
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 witnessed a massive fall to around 60
grams
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 per person per week in 2004.
In contrast
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, consumed chicken
meat
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 rose sharply from approximately 140
grams
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 in 1979 to 240
grams
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 per person per week in 2004.
On the other hand
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, the
consumption
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 of
fish
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 saw a slight decrease over
this
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period
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, merely 15
grams
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 in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, meat, period, consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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