In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, it is argued that there is no need for food or products made from
animals
.
While
I partially agree that some kinds of those
things
can be displaced by other materials, I believe that there is still a necessity to
use
animals
for food and
use
animal products. On the one hand, there are some reasons why some specific
things
are no longer a must for us human beings. As technology grows rapidly, there is a substitute for
things
like clothing or baby toys. You can
use
the
artifacts
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to play the roles
animals
used to play.
Therefore
,
due to
the fact that there is an urgent problem with the decrease in the number of habitats of
animals
and the loss of biological diversity, I do understand that many people would reckon that we should no longer
use
animal products and regard
animals
as food.
On the other hand
, I concur that there is still a necessity to
use
animals
.
Firstly
, there are something
animals
bring to us which is unsubstituted.
For instance
, we can extract something like some minerals which may serve as a must for important medicine only from
animals
. Those kinds of
things
are believed too hard to be manufactured by us humans but are crucial to our lives.
Secondly
, if we cut down the
use
of
animals
, there will be lots of people losing their jobs,
thus
having a negative influence on social stability. All in all,
although
I agree with the opinion that
animals
are our friends,
as well as
some are unnecessary for us, we still need to
use
animals
in some specific ways.
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