Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

While
others believe that each type
crime
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should have the same level of
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only about the
crime
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but
also
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committing it.
This
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conviction for each type of
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the
circumstances
before the judge, and
then
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there are people who argue that it would be better if the ones who are responsible for the judgment to choose
one
typical
punishment
for
one
type of
crime
, despite the
circumstances
of it.
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, some people
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that if there was a situation ,whether it is a normal argument or a huge
one
leading to death, leads someone to kill the other to defend themselves against the danger, that they should have the same
punishment
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Moreover
, the people who believe in
this
opinion claim that it will be easier for the judge to know immediately the right judgment.
On the other hand
, there is plenty of evidence in the real world that
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how important to know the whole situation and motivations for the
crime
before taking the
punishment
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a person who
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the other life just to defend himself from a simple threat that he might be wrong about or an individual who killed the other
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for the judge to take all the
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consideration , as I mentioned in the earlier example , the
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safe does not equal the huge threat of who was under
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attack from a dangerous interaction .
To conclude
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consideration, which
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moral equivalency and
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that prevents
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injustice to be brought against the victims.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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