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Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Scholars approve that
people
destroing
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destroying
destroy
 their
health
 by eating fast
food
alot
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a lot
. Several
people
 believe that the solution to
this
 problem is to have
health
 education,
while
 others think education is not enough. I would argue that
people
 keenly need to learn about
harmful
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the harmful
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 effects of junk
food
. On the one hand, it is
widly
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widely
 believed that improving the knowledge of how much fast
food
 is a disaster for their
health
 is the right way to prevent or at least reduce eating it. Because it is often high in calories, fat, and sugar but low in nutrients and
fiber
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fibre
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. Consuming it frequently may raise your risk of obesity, heart attack, and other
health
 issues. For
instace
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instance
,
a
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research has been made by World
Health
 Organization in 2020 about fast
food
 effects. The results were totally
shocked
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, 80% of
people
 who
eating
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ate
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 it rapidly were having depression because of the
obisty
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obesity
 it causes.
Thus
, if we all
educaute
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educate
our self
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ourselves
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 about the side
imapacts
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impacts
 of fast
food
, we will stay healthy.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think education is
inefficient
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the inefficient
an inefficient
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 way.Because junk
food
is sweeps
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is sweeping
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 the globe and
people
 are heavily appetite about it. In
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addition
addtion
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 they are watching junk
food
 ads everywhere which
lead
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leads
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 them to starve even if they are not really hungry.
For example
, when they
on
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are on
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 the road to come back from work, they will see many ads for
Kfc
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KFC
,
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and alot
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alot
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a lot
 of
people
 follow their appetite and buy
food
 quickly.
Therefore
,
While
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apply
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eating fast
food
 occasionally is not a problem but overdoing it leads to
health
 issues.
To conclude
,
although
 views differ
depends
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depend
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 on
people
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people's
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believe
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beliefs
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. I would say educating
people
 is essentially
method
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a method
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 to prevent any
dieases
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diseases
 like cancer.
Also
 to keep our bodies full of energy and
health
.
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