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Many work people today work at home rather than in an office. Are there more advantages to working remotely than disadvantages?

#work #people #home #office
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Increasingly, companies around the
world
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 have been organizing themselves to hire
people
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 for working remotely.
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, for those
people
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 who used to
work
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 at offices, it will be a big change. So, employees will have to update some skills and adapt to
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 new
world
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. In my opinion, remote
work
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 will help the environment, city traffic, quality of life, and pleasure. To commence, since the Covid pandemic hit our
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 companies and
people
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 needed to change their lives for trying something new, even for those who were resistant, because the only way to keep in touch was by technology.
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, an article written by BBC Brazil presents some data about two initiatives, which shows the increasing number of remote workers, and the decreasing number of pollution. In my view point, it has been happing only for one reason, the fewest cars on the streets and
people
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 become conscious.
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, of course, there are many jobs where is impossible to
work
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 remotely. So. it has no problem because analogical jobs should keep going as well.
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, those
people
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 who need to drive from home to
work
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 realized the quality of traffic in the new digital
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 happens.
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 the Infrastructure Service in Brazil, a study made by Harvard University brings up to humanity that the
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 has 30% fewer vehicles on street. To be honest, those who live in Sao Paulo or Rio de Janeiro go to
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 and back home are more comfortable. In conclusion, I spent my whole essay time only talking about the advantages. In fact, I really believe, the period after the pandemic shows us the big opportunity that society has to become the globe healthy and light.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • flexibility
  • commuting time
  • productivity
  • focus
  • work-life balance
  • stress
  • distractions
  • global talent pool
  • environmental benefits
  • cost savings
  • face-to-face interaction
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • work and personal life separation
  • dependence on technology
  • internet connection
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • career growth
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