The diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane

The diagram  shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane
The diagram illustrates the stages sugarcane undergoes to produce sugar.
Overall
, it is seen that sugarcane passes through seven processes, from the growing of the sugarcane to the drying and cooling of the crystal, which is the final step. The first stage of production begins with growing the sugar for 12-18 months.
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includes preparation of land, planting stems and grooming until it is matured for harvesting. Harvesting which is the second step can be carried out either manually with the aid of a machete by the farmer or use of a machine to cut and transfer the harvested cane to a site where it is cleaned and introduced to a machine that acts to extract juice by crushing the canes. The extracted juice is filtered using a limestone filter under a process known as purification, after which the juice is passed through evaporation by heating to produce syrup.
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, the syrup is placed in a centrifuge, which acts by spinning to separate the syrup from crystals. The crystals
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moved ,off to the final stage which involves drying and cooling and sugar is ready for consumption.
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